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Philosophies Without Passion by *riencuran:iconriencuran:



An innocent comment
accompanied by laughter;
the perversion of the mind at 3AM
never ceases to amaze.

We all have past secrets-
mine are wrapped in ribbons,
and set on fire;
street sweepers come to take them away,
but they only come around election time
and the ashes are piling up,
the secrets are damp with deceit
and the flames don’t always catch.

The sun burned out long ago,
back before innocence was lost,
and it’s too late for us to get philosophical now-
it’s too late for a lot of things.
It’s too late for you, too late for me,
too late for secret-telling and selling,
and the skyline has become a wasteland.

Sunrise and coffee and cheap cafes,
burning pennies for our thoughts
because keeping them seems pointless;
we are the kings and Fools of time,
and Galileo has nothing on us.  
We throw out dreams, while
he throws out theories.

We all have dark secrets,
lying dormant beneath translucent skin;
remember that,
and watch what words you say.

If I growl and curse, dear
it’s all because I love you-
but be careful of the girl
you find yourself losing track of time with.
©2008-2009 *riencuran
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Was talking to ~loudwisdom, and he said

me: i think we all have past secrets...
him: mine are wrapped in ribbons
him: and then set on fire
him: and then
him: street sweepers come
him: but they only come around election time
him: cheap bastards
me:...now that's poetic =D

He wouldn't write anything however, because has no passion for writing at the moment; he needs inspiration, fuel, the power source behind the energy.

So I wrote something, inspired by tonight's conversation with wiz (as you are now dubbed).

Voila!

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Lol awesome lil tale. I love it when things work out like that. Really kick ass works this time Adele. I really like this one :) As per usual great imagery and your words flow beautifully :)
I love your poetry - you did say you were only 17? It's fantastic. That whole second stanza is delicious (:heart:), and you have a way of spinning off the most beautiful phrases: "We all have dark secrets,/lying dormant beneath translucent skin." (Translucent is a lovely word.) The only critique I can offer is perhaps a single dash instead of doubles, and the capitalization of "if" in the first line of the last stanza.

'Tis marvelous.
omfg i love you :glomp: this was brilliant. how you did this is incredible. you are the greatest hands down without doubt. Thanks for this it made me smile ^-^ your just so great to my life ^-^

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Everyone feels a certain way for a reason, when you read a person’s poem you’re glimpsing at their very soul
uau! the end is amazing! love it!

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"Crystallized, as I lay here and rest
Eyes of glass stare directly at death
From deep sleep I have broken away
No one knows, no one hears what I say"
:dance: I love how you took his idea and formed a poem around it. It's always great to be able to take an idea or a word/phrase/whatever and do this. It's great! Kudos to you and wisdom for being so creative!

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~*~We Survive What We Can't Change~*~
:blackrose:Regrets are mistakes you don't learn from:blackrose:
Surrender to the Truth: [link]
Believe the Lie: [link]
I couldn't have made it without you. So, being inspirational to me, you're the greatest =P

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A purpose of human life, no matter who is controlling it, is to love whoever is around to be loved.
-Kurt Vonnegut
I couldn't have done it without him ^^

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A purpose of human life, no matter who is controlling it, is to love whoever is around to be loved.
-Kurt Vonnegut
That was simply gorgeous. I love it. Great job. :]

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rain flow to the roots
rain drench my boots
rain douse the flame
rain forget this poet's name
Beautiful, as always.
:D You guys both did a great job

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~*~We Survive What We Can't Change~*~
:blackrose:Regrets are mistakes you don't learn from:blackrose:
Surrender to the Truth: [link]
Believe the Lie: [link]

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